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Re: ART
Hello! I really like this, and I especially like the ending. I was a bit confused though, I thought the title was "art" because that's what's at the top, but ...
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Re: Wrong
Hi! I liek your poem but I think it's a little vague. And it's good to leave your poem open to interpretation so that the reader can assume whatever they ...
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Re: Those Three Words
Hello! I think the concept of this poem is something a lot of people will be able to relate to. However, I'm not sure I'm keen on the narrator talking ...
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Re: What does it matter
At first I thought this poem was about giving up and losing hope, but as it continued I thought it was more abou having hope despite things going wrong, because ...
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Re: Wonder
Hello! This is quite interesting, and it's open to interpretation, which I like. The use of wonder sounds a bit repetitive in the first stanza and I don't like the ...
Feb 3, 2010 -
Re: Should I run or Should I hide? With Grace I have complied
Hello! I think the rhyming you have used gets very repetitive in this poem, and then it comes as a bit of a shock for the reader when the final ...
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Re: While we were in slumber
This is beautiful, I love your imagery just as it is - you describe things very well. I like how you describe the wind, and the sky "pricked" with silver ...
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Re: The Sword and The Pen
This flows really well and I like the description you used, especially "sharp-edged and glittering". You need a question mark at the end of the second stanza, though. I like ...
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Re: My Monsoon
I like how short this is, because you managed to still make it powerful. You kind of mixed two metaphors towards the end though - perhaps the wind could be ...
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Re: Flowing Swiftly
You describe the water very well here, and I would liek to think that this poem could be a metaphor for something deeper. I ahve no idea what this line ...
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Re: Beauty
I really, really like this. You describe loads of different things without making it seem cluttered, and I love the message that it sends about all the different beauty of ...
Feb 3, 2010 -
Re: Our Own Private Betrayal
This is a really thoughtful, subtle poem. I had to think about it quite a bit, and I guess people could get different meanings out of it, which I love. ...
Feb 3, 2010 -
Re: One Night With You
You describe the things you have done very well in this poem. It makes it easy to picture everything that's going on. I'm not sure I like the ending. I ...
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Re: this is a poem about love
I think this poem is very good, but it's a poem written to someone, and because you're not talking to me, I can't get as much out of it as ...
Feb 3, 2010 -
Re: Marmalade
Hi! This poem is simple and effective, and I really like it. Your rhyming scheme is very good, not forced at all, and I like your description. I've never tried ...
Feb 3, 2010
